Written for Friday Wrtings #85 :First Lines
Inspired by the first lines of......
"By the river Piedra I sat down and wept "
---Paulo Coelho
Be thou silent
I wait no answers
and as the longings conjure
and break of their own might
The torrential rain of heavens
touching the ground
a sorrow drenches my heart
A mountain I stand
feeling the gale of your thoughts
A clock ticking in the sky
your heart beats hear I
Once your dreams
had been mine
Now I carry the burden
of another's broken dream
The tears that flow
meets the river of prayer
my weeping shall be
an entreaty to God
and so solace shall be found
* The first lines begin by the same words as the name of the novel .
How terribly heavy broken dreams must be. Particularly if they aren't our own, I suppose. Thank goodness for the hope of solace...
ReplyDeleteMagaly, she knows that her dreams cannot be built on another's broken dreams, but there is surely hope and solace. Thank you
ReplyDeleteyour imgery so brilliantly describes the melancholy and emotions in the poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you Lee San
ReplyDeleteThat image of rain and the burden of someone else's broken dreams is quite telling...
ReplyDeleteThank you Rajani
DeleteA powerful, dramatic piece.
ReplyDeleteThank you Rosemary
ReplyDelete"Once your dreams had been mine" … how things can change. Yes, when love slips through our fingers, down a river into the sea, we can only hope and pray the solace of a higher power will see us through.
ReplyDeleteThank you Penelope for your beautiful comment.
Delete"Once your dreams had been mine"
ReplyDeleteSuch an emotional statement.
Lovely
ReplyDeleteThank you Geetashree
DeleteSomething that's been on my mind lately...prayer does offer solace for our emotions, but not in any of the ways we understand before making a practice of prayer. Only to the extent that we really detach ourselves from ourselves and focus on the Infinite does prayer help. That's why so many people think prayer doesn't help them; they imagine that it's supposed to "be answered" in ways it's not likely to be... I think this poem captures some of the insight I've had in mind.
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